Friday, May 22, 2009

My First Friday Flash 55


Goodbyes are spoken in a flurry of kisses blown through glass. She falls in line. I watch until she is out of sight.

My feet carry my heavy heart to the elevator. All are quiet, riding down to the lobby. Someone whispers, “This is hard.” We nod in unison.


This week’s jail visit is over.

9 comments:

  1. That was a bit of a surprise. We dragons like surprises. It must be sad when you have to leave somebody in jail.
    For a first 55 this really good.

    We are up here:
    http://www.dragonlairs.blogspot.com/

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  2. Wow. Excellent writing. It puts me to shame.

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  3. You nailed it.

    There is nothing else to say.

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  4. HBS....Very moving 55 .
    The beauty of this little exercise is that it is easy, yet expressive.
    For your first time you nailed the essence of the 55 dead on!!
    Thank You very much for sharing this little gem with us all.
    I hope you can return next Friday with another contribution.
    Thanks for visiting The G-Man, and have a Great Week-End...Galen

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  5. Touching, and a great last line.

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  6. wow, great 55 for first time.

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  7. Wow very good. Brave soul. I haven't even tried yet...maybe someday. You are good though!

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